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Editorial #1

Game misconduct for NHL owners, players

Original Form:

Instead of trying to recruit fans and boost morale and appreciation for hockey, the National Hockey League (NHL) and NHL Players Association are more focused on earning money. They aren't making as much money as they would like, so they enforced a 'lockout', preventing any hockey game associated with the National Hockey League to occur. Not caring about the consequences associated with the Lockout and what it could mean for the future of hockey.

(If greed is good, then it would be interesting to see who has the largest picture of Gordon Gekko hanging in the office.)

Standardized Form: 

1) The NHL and NHL Players Association are more focused on salaries than the sport which hockey provides.
2) It is no longer about the "love of the game", but rather who can rack up a higher salary.
3) The element of greed comes into play. (missing premise, assumed)
4) With greed comes the sense of entitlement, power and doesn't allow an equal share for everyone involved.
5)  The NHL earns more money by increasing the prices of tickets, and as a result the fans find it difficult to afford to attend hockey games.
Thus, 
6) If this continues all the NHL will have left is rows of empty seats with no fans to fill them.
Therefore,
7) The NHL and NHL Players Association doesn't seem to care about the future of hockey.