Standardizing Arguments: Unedited

Editorial #1

Game misconduct for NHL owners, players

Original Form:

Instead of trying to recruit fans and boost morale and appreciation for hockey, the National Hockey League (NHL) and NHL Players Association are more focused on earning money. They aren't making as much money as they would like, so they enforced an Lockout, preventing any hockey game associated with the National Hockey League to occur. Not caring about the consequences associated with the Lockout and what it could mean for the future of hockey.

(If greed is good, then it would be interesting to see who has the largest picture of Gordon Gekko hanging in the office.)

Standardized Form:

1) The NHL and NHL Players Association don't care about the fan anymore, but rather the money associated with hockey.

2) It is no longer about the "love of the game", but rather who can rack up a higher salary; greed comes into play. (Missing premise, assumed).

3) With greed comes the sense of entitlement, power and doesn't allow an equal share for everyone involved.

4)  As a result, the NHL earns more money, and fans are finding it even more difficult to afford to attend hockey games.

5) If this continues, all the NHL will have left is rows of empty seats with no fans to fill them.

6) In the end, it doesn't matter about the fans or hockey, but rather how much money the NHL gets to put in their pockets by the end of the hockey season.

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Editorial #2

Justice for Ashley

Original Form:

Police and corrections officials sometimes argue that videos showing them doing their jobs under tough circumstances can be misleading without context.

  

Standardized Form:

1) The corrections system is failing to provide proper mental health support for female prisoners.

2) As a result, many female prisoners are being treated improperly and being neglected of their basic rights.

4) Like Ashley Smith, many female inmates are experiencing the true nature of the Corrections System (resorting to choking/cutting themselves, being injected with drugs without consent, bound and taped and being taunted by officers, ect...)

4) This treatment is both horrible and displays a true reflection of a corrupt Corrections System that doesn`t properly treat and support inmates suffering from mental illness.

5) In conclusion, the corrections system and officials are failing to do their jobs and neglecting inmates.